27.9.10

The Message Beneath The Rubble


And we build monuments
so that we don't forget.

Today, I built one for you
but all of the earth shook
and took it down to the ground.

Maybe...

I just wasn't supposed
to remember you

11 comments:

  1. Oh wow! This is such a beautiful poem, and even more beautiful is the story it tells. Well done!

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  2. this one consumed me... beautiful!

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  3. Nice, or maybe the earth wants you to big it much bigger.

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  4. Or maybe we don't need the physical to remember? Just a thought. lovely work!

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  5. I am not supposed to remember you at all. And i keep thinking that i do not.
    But today morning when i got up and looked in the mirror, i had become a monument; your memories my accolades.

    This is beautiful!! Kp Up!

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  6. Maybe not... I love this, pithy, to the point: this, this, and lesson learned. Still, there's a sadness there, or is that me? :)

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  7. wow- that was good-true for my world today... I really love reading what you write.

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  8. Amazing how sometimes the falling of a monument, and capturing the sentiment in art, may remain more memorable than the initial structure. Great write! cheers

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  9. Ah, you took the ground from under my feet.. what a fabulous poem, this.. wow! A standing ovation to you..

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  10. What a beauty and the way you have confirmed the inevitable was so sad and powerful... thanks for sharing..


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    Om Namah Shivaya
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